I would ask for gold, and boats and play things, Toys for me to crunch and make explode, And if they didn’t give them, Id eat more of their kids,
And now and again some humans would come, And try to kill me we their toys, And Id play with them untill they die.
I would swoop and attack, And laugh, As they try to fend me off.
I would burn their towns, Their cities, Their crops both near and far.
And their elders, and desperate, Would come and beg me for an ear. “Please, oh lord Dragon” “Don’t eat my daughter, Oh Lord Dragon”
Ah, what a crunching sound they make.
Gloating from afar, The humans would send me their girls, Nom nom nom nom nom nom….
Get to burn some tourists, Crunching crunching burning crunch,
The humans would scream, And beg, And plead for their lives and for their kids, And I would ponder for a while.
Then when they think that I, Might by chance let them live, That’s when I eat their kids.
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Across vast oceans, her master will reach her, To teach her delights, no mortals possess. She will enter my world, and discover its splendor, Then completely surrender, to my tender caress.
It sounds fine the way it is, I think though on this line:
“Please, oh lord Dragon” “Don’t eat my daughter, Oh Lord Dragon"
Instead of the second 'Oh Lord Dragon' I think you should put 'Oh dear' It would rhyme with ear on the line two above from it, so it would flow a little better, plus it sort of coincides with the next stanza below it as if they are exclaiming it before seeing their death.
But it is just my opinion, and simply just a suggestion of constructive criticism.
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*Clan·des·tine (kln-ds'tn) adj. Kept or done in secret, often in order to conceal an illicit or improper purpose.
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Neko Neko 69 -> Music -> I could use some help writing a song. About being a dragon, what eats people.
